Week 3 Story: As Told by Manthara
Okay, so everyone knows my story. Or at least, they think
they know my story. It’s the one with that stupid prince Rama and the ugly misshapen
servant, Manthara. Well, that’s me, ugly hunchback lady. I’m here to tell my side
of the story (the real story!). This is
a story about a group of tyrants, the jungle, and revenge. Don’t read this if
you want to believe that Rama and the royal family are perfect, honorable
people (spoiler: they aren’t). Don’t read this if you think assassination is
wrong or you’re afraid of the jungle. If you’re not scared of the truth, this is
a story you’re gonna love.
First, I should tell you about my younger days. I was born ugly.
There’s no doubt about it. My face is totally screwed up. Plus, there’s that
hunchback. Not cool. But that’s just the way I was born. Nothing I can do about
it. Naturally, everyone was scared of me. It’s hard to find a decent job when
no one wants to look at you. There’s only one job for people that look like me.
You get to be a slave! Sometimes, the family you get to serve is nice. They don’t
care about the hunchback. Other times, you don’t get so lucky. As you probably know,
I was a slave for the royal family. I served one of King Dasharatha’s many
wives, Kaikeyi. This means I also serve the children. One day, I had to fetch
some water for Rama’s bath. The well was quite far from the bath area, and I
was tired that day. I guess that I took too long for Rama’s liking, because he
started to scream and yell at me when I returned. When a price screams at you,
there’s not much you can do. You have to take it, so I did. Rama wouldn’t calm
down. Then, the brat picked up this giant stick, and wacked my hump with it!
Man, did it hurt! Humps are extra sensitive spots. I knew that it would hurt
for days. I had to crawl away from that little brat. Luckily, when I went inside,
Prince Bharata was there. He helped me up and started to fix the sore on my
hump. Now, we all knew that Prince Rama was in line for the throne. He was loved
by the King and the towns people. But I knew the truth! He was a mean, cruel,
selfish little boy! From that day, I decided that I would do everything in my
power to make sure he didn’t become king.
When I heard about Rama’s quest into the jungle, I knew that
this was my chance. Lakshmana told me all about the trip he was taking with his
brother. Now, if you’ve never been to the jungle, just know that it’s horrifying.
There’s hardly any food, there’s no place to sleep (except the ground), and it’s
filled with wild beasts and demons. It’s basically a death sentence. So, if
someone dies in the jungle, it’s not suspicious at all! Perfect. Of course, I
know some rakshasas that live in this jungle. Right before the Prince left on
his journey, I went to go visit my friend Thataka. We’ve been friends for a
long time now. She’s a great rakshasa. She can throw boulders like they’re
light as air! Amazing. I told her all about Rama the jerk, and she agreed that
someone like him should never take the throne. She told me that she would take care
of it. I’m sure that you heard how that went! She tried her best, but somehow
the stupid prince defeated Thataka. That was my first plan, but it certainly
wasn’t my last. This time I won’t mess it up. I’ll make sure that Rama is
banished and the kind Prince Bharata can take the throne!
Author's Note:
This story is based off of two stories in the Ramayana. "Thataka" from Indian Myth and Legend by Donald A. Mackenzie and "Manthara and Kaikeyi" from Indian Myth and Legend by Donald A. Mackenzie.In "Thataka" Rama has to defeat a rakshasi in the jungle. For this story, I wanted to explore why Thataka (the rakshasai) decided to attack Rama. In the story "Manthara and Kaikeyi" I was interested in Manthara. She's the misshapen servant that schemes to get Rama exiled. I thought that exploring her story would be kinda fun. The Ramayana doesn't explain why she wants Rama off the throne. I decided to tell her story, from her point of view. In this version, she was actually behind the attack on Rama in the woods. I wanted to make her a reoccurring villain. In this version of the story, she's responsible for many of the hardships that Rama goes through. The attack in the jungle is only the first one!
Image Info:
Manthara (Wayang Kulit shadow puppet)
Found on Indian Epics Blog
Hi Grayce! I really enjoyed your re-telling of this story. The character has such an individual and strong voice, and the modern writing style you used makes it so fun and easy to read. I loved the part where Manthara addresses how everyone loves Rama, but she knows how he really is. The Ramayana really focused on Rama being perfect, but I am sure he had to hurt some people to make others love him. There is no way to make everyone like someone, and you did a great job of explaining someone who sees Rama from a different perspective.
ReplyDeleteI wonder if there were any other events where Rama was unkind to Manthara? Manthara seems extremely determined to kill Rama after the wacking incident, so I would assume there had to have been tension building up.
It could be interesting to write another story about Rama feeling remorse for his actions here. Would Manthara forgive him? Or would she hold a grudge against him? Just some interesting questions to think about!
Anyways, really great job with this!
Hi Grayce,
ReplyDeleteI already fell victim to reading the rest of your story after the first sentence. When reading the Ramayana, I wondered why Manthra hated Rama so much.
I really enjoyed the unique perspective you retold this story from. I love the attitude you add to Manthra! It makes the story funny and entertaining.
I wonder what would happen if Manthra would have just let things play out. If Rama was never banished, would Ravana ever meet his death? That would surely ruin the gods' plan.
The only what if I can think of is what if there was more to the story. I am anxious to read the next part of Manthra's plot retold! I enjoyed your version of the conflict between Manthra and Rama.
P.S. I am still not convinced Rama is a bad person haha, there is no way the righteous prince could be so mean! These events however, would explain why she hates him so much.
Hi Grayce!
ReplyDeleteI think writing the story from this point of view was a great idea. Telling the side of someone who is seen as evil in this story is interesting. Manthara sounds like she has been holding a strong grudge against Rama for awhile. Was Rama always this disrespectful to Manthara. Also, I wonder if Manthara played in any part in Rama becoming exile and Bharata becoming king since Bharata helped with her sore. Great story!
Grayce,
ReplyDeleteThis comment is meant to be feedback for your story!
I really enjoyed you creativity in writing this story. I would never have thought to write from a perspective of a character that appeared so little. I loved the idea that Manthara was responsible for sending rakshasas after Rama in the jungle. That is brilliant.
I wonder if you could have added to the number of events that caused Manthara to hate Rama so much? I'm not sure that her motivation is entirely reasonable- Rama hit her with a stick as a child so she wants him to DIE? That may be a stretch. Adding another element or two could really make her viewpoint reasonable.
You wrote that you wanted to make her a recurring villain in your author's note. Could you potentially make her responsible for creating the unrest in Rama's people that ultimately causes him to exile Sita!?
Great creative story. I'm looking forward to future installments.